Thursday, January 17, 2013

Tanka of the Day



The Knickerbockers
are playing and I’m watching
my dad said to me
I said, “You’ve dated yourself.”
He said, “Not me, but the years.”

3 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

Read your tanka post
I admit I did not know
What a tanka is.
You work constantly to help
others be creative too

January 18, 2013 at 8:38 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Beautiful. Do you like one poetry style or do you discover various ways to express yourself in various styles?

- ShloimeTAS

January 20, 2013 at 8:04 AM  
Blogger rabbi neil fleischmann said...


Thank you Anonymous. It means A LOT to me that my writing rubs off on others in that it gets them to write. Your tanka was heartfelt and touched me.

Shloime TAS - thank you. It's amazing how powerful one word can be, particularly the word "beautiful."

A question about my poetry writing proclivity! Have I died and gone to heaven?

The answer to your question, I think, is more the latter than the former. I just like writing poetry.

Some years ago I heard someone read haiku at a poetry gathering in a shul and I was inspired to give it a try. They're good for writing on the go, while waiting for a bus, etc.

Once, when I shared haiku with a dear friend he told me about tanka, and I started doing some of those. When I put out my book I put tanka on the back burner and got more into haiku again.

Here are two tanka I wrotw:

When one is jealous
One seeks to destroy that thing
That makes one jealous
Unless there is hope that is
Then one learns from jealousy

I am an onion
and have to leave Ur Kasdim
to unpeel my self
We each cut through our layers
If we are to say we lived

Tanka predates haiku!

Please take a look at this post where I first introduced tanka to this blog. Take careful note of the comments!!!

http://rabbifleischmann.blogspot.com/2008/09/no-is-complete-sentence.html

And here is a link to several posts which include my tanka:

http://rabbifleischmann.blogspot.com/search?q=tanka

I recently wrote my first pantoum, which involves each four line stanza being made of two of the lines from the stanza before it. It received this email review: "This should be the only pantoum in existence." High praise. And yet. (I am not yet ready to put it out there over here.)

S.TAS your question brought me meaning and happiness, I could write about this for a long time, actually - I just did.

Thanks again to my two commenters here. What a great way to start a day!

January 21, 2013 at 6:57 AM  

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