"Late last night I heard" - J.M.
o
"Thank you very much"
has a clichéd ring to it
We need something else
A filled restaurant
One day everyone will go
Does everyone live?
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Big Yellow Ellul Pt. 1
Everything starts
falling, while the
king walks in
the field, and we
each go out to
greet him, tell me
does this all seem
unreal?
Like a knot curled
in your shoulder
there's a tension
running deep, the
kind of fear that
builds up as you
can't even dream
of sleep.
posted by rabbi neil fleischmann @ 11:59 PM
4 Comments:
The Elul poem is fine. Well-written with feeling.
Thank you. I was thinking to do an acrostic of ELLUL - these paragrasphs are E and L. But it may just be done. I really appreciate the feedback, paricularly on poetry.
Regarding other post - while I'm here - Dara Horn is not Orthodox but very well versed in her Judaism and a top notch writer. I recommend her work highly.
I'm not doing this poem justice. It paints an elusive picture in your mind beyond the plain meaning of the words. That's what I like about it.
thank you very much. i don't know how to put it in words and i don't know to what extent i get there but i think you're onto something. good poems kind of dangle images in and out of your sight so you see something really clearly and are clearly mystified by it at the same time...
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